Original Version (126 words)
Made a present
Bumbo baby sitter, it's a seat for the baby care, was arrived at my Lab because I ordered it at internet shopping mal two days ago to make a present for my niece. The occasion of the gift was that I felt sorry because I have not give her anything since her was bone on August 28, 2007 and my old sister forced a little.
When I went home, I was happy because thought that she sit in the seat of Bumbo although it is heavy and bulk. But when I arrived home, she was sleeping so disappointed. however after dinner she got up and sit the seat. I am pleased because look at the angel to sit in the seat of Bumbo!
Corrected Version(Capitals)
Made a present
Bumbo baby sitter IS a seat for baby care. IT arrived at my Lab because I ordered it at THE internet shopping MALL two days ago to make a present for my niece. The occasion of the gift was that I felt sorry because I have not GIVEN her anything since SHE was BORN on August 28, 2 007 and my oldER sister forced ME a little.
When I went home, I was happy because I thought that she WOULD sit in the seat of Bumbo although it is heavy and bulkY. But when I arrived home, she was sleeping. SO I WAS disappointed. However after dinner she got up and sAt IN the seat. I am pleased because lookED LIKE AN angel SITTING in the seat of Bumbo!
