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Original Version (120 words)
My first Riding
Today was the first day that I ride my new bike. I bouht the bike three days ago. I spared two days through all night for the bike settings of gear, breadk and something like that. As I spended much time for the setting, I was so excited.
After school that was 9 pm, I was going to riding.My first destination of riding was Guro station. the distance from my home to Guro station is about 7.9km, this is turned into about 4.9mile, and it took me about 30 minutes one way. It was some little hard but fun.
I arrived at home and after I planned of a bicycle trip that going to Chuncheon, I slept.
Corrected Version(Capitals)
My First RIDE
Today was the first day that I RODE my new bike. I bouGht the bike three days ago. I SPENT two days AND NIGHTS SETTING THE GEARS AND THE BRAKES. AFTER I spenT SO much time for the setting, I was so excited.
After school ABOUT 9 pm, I was going to GO riding.My first destination was Guro station. The distance from my home to Guro station is about 7.9km, WHICH IS about 4.9 mileS, and it took me about 30 minutes one way. It was A LITTLE DIFFICULT but fun.
I arrived at home. THEN I planned a bicycle trip to Chuncheon. AFTER THAT I slept.
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