Brian's World

Original Version (147 words)

The last night with the missionary Sin mi sun in Korea.
Today, I went to the elder Choi's house to meet missionary Sin before she go to Cambodia. we made a plan of talking during staying over night and decided to come together on the church at 10 pm.
Although I hurried to go to church on time by bike, a little late when I got out home. So I went fast. This ride was more long then first ride because passed the Guro station. But there is a bicycle path along the Anyang stream from Guro to church, It is not difficult than what I thought. It took about an hour and half to go church and I arrived there without accident.
Then we went to the elder Choi's house by hers car and talked with missionary Sin all night. It was a very instructive experience.

Corrected Version(Capitals)

The last night with the missionary Sin mi sun in Korea.
Today, I went to the elder Choi's house to meet missionary Sin before she RETURNED to Cambodia. we made a plan of talking during staying over night and decided to come together on the church at 10 pm.
Although I hurried to go to church on time by bike, IT WAS a little late when I LEFT home. So I RODE fast. This ride was LONGER then first ride because passed the Guro station. But there is a bicycle path along the Anyang stream from Guro to church, It is not AS difficult ASI thought. It took about an hour and half to go church and I arrived there without accident.
Then we went to the elder Choi's house by hercar and talked with missionary Sin all night. It was a very instructive experience.

Original Version (126 words)

Made a present
 Bumbo baby sitter, it's a seat for the baby care, was arrived at my Lab because I ordered it at internet shopping mal two days ago to make a present for my niece. The occasion of the gift was that I felt sorry because I have not give her anything since her was bone on August 28, 2007 and my old sister forced a little.
 When I went home, I was happy because thought that she sit in the seat of Bumbo although it is heavy and bulk. But when I arrived home, she was sleeping so disappointed. however after dinner she got up and sit the seat. I am pleased because look at the angel to sit in the seat of Bumbo!

Corrected Version(Capitals)

Made a present
 Bumbo baby sitter IS a seat for  baby care. IT arrived at my Lab because I ordered it at THE internet shopping MALL two days ago to make a present for my niece. The occasion of the gift was that I felt sorry because I have not GIVEN her anything since SHE was BORN on August 28, 2 007 and my oldER sister forced ME a little.
 When I went home, I was happy because I thought that she WOULD sit in the seat of Bumbo although it is heavy and bulkY. But when I arrived home, she was sleeping. SO I WAS disappointed. However after dinner she got up and sAt IN the seat. I am pleased because lookED LIKE AN angel SITTING  in the seat of Bumbo!

Original Version (128 words)

Listen about the Interpreter
 I got up late in this morning. I hurried but when left home, I know late 15 minute.
Usually I go to the school by subway. When I went to Sosa station, turned on the radio and listened to the EBS radio, Morning Special which is a English program.
 Today's special guest was a international interpreter, Ju Young Kim. I know that Korea name Ju Young means honor of God. She gave a lot of talk about a interpreter in English but I didn't listen well. Though, I can understand two things which she emphasized that are hearing and sense because it is possible that unexpected situation is occurred during the talk. I felt sympathy and arrived at the school on listening to the radio.

Corrected Version(Capitals)

Listen TO AN Interpreter
 I got up late this morning. I hurried but when left home, I know late 15 minute. (I KNEW I WAS ABOUT 15 MINUTES LATE)
Usually I go to the school by subway. When I went to Sosa station, I turned on the radio and listened to the EBS radio, "Morning Special" which is a English program.
 Today's special guest was a international interpreter, Ju Young Kim. I know that THE KOREAN NAME Ju Young means honor of God. She gave a LONG talk about BEING AN interpreter in English but I didn't listen well. HOWEVER, I DID understand two things which she emphasized. THESE are hearing and sense (?????) because it is possible that unexpected situationS WILL OCCUR during the talk. I felt sympathy and arrived at the school STILL listening to the radio.